उदास मन : Hindi Haiku

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            उदास मन 
                                                           चौखटे में जड़ा है 
                                                             चटका दर्पण 

Loosely translated as -                                                                                                                                      Glum, desolate  heart 
                                                           exquisitely framed in gold 
                                                          cracked, splintered mirror


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    1. Thanks Nimi, Effects of your company eh ! :)

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  2. Profound and sad. Way to go Kokila. A hindi Haiku :) Wandering thoughts ruminating the same and the crack in reflection. Superbly done! I am amazed how easily you're penning one after the other! :)

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    1. Am glad Shanx It resonated well with you.... what I mean becomes irrelevant when beautifully varied interpretations are offered.... Thanks for the words Shanx. I mean it :)

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    2. Well, I could see loneliness and the cracks.. but a facade with perfect frame wasn't something I could read in :( (my bad) It adds to the beauty! Please do let me know if I didn't get the gist right. Really do want to know :) keep writing :)

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    3. *smiles* Perfect Shanx... you have got it right :)
      The beauty of literature lies in, that different people being through different experiences, different treatment by life and people ..... see different things... and that's what brings NOVELTY and RICHNESS to the piece with each reading :)
      in Vidhya's interpretation of IRONY haiku...We(ALL friends ) were seeing A while she n my mother were sighting Z. Best part- both are good and beautiful :)
      And I vehemently clarify that by literature I mean classics and not the above pathetic attempt ! :) And yes u r right on spot :)

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  3. Nice words and translation too....Trust is like a mirror...It's hard to overlook the cracks

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    1. Thanks Vidhya.... I wanted to convey that ' no one knows the desolation of a lonely heart....... just like an ornate frame bars people to move further to observe the cracks of a mirror and ACT..... similarly being framed in social, professional, personal obligations, a painted happy exterior, no one 'TRIES" to understand the tumult, the cracks of the heart................ Its the frame the world is content with ... THUS the heart remains sad forever framed in its seemingly happy beauty.
      PS. Robin Williams can be an example :) I feel you'll enjoy it better now Vidhya... the sole reason for my explanation is your pleasure friend :)

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  4. Oh, such a beautifully written and enchanting piece. Unfortunately, its just far too much easier to accept the perfect exterior than taking an effort to look inside see the cracks of sorrow. But then again, it takes some determination and and a lot of patience to find the person who is in fact willing to look inside. It'll be worth the wait then, wouldn't it?

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    1. Thanks Priyanshi and a warm welcome to the space... yes it worth the wait ...but it hurts like hell when apne aisa karte hain .....
      as you have rightly said.. THAT's unfortunate.
      am glad you find something to please you on your maiden visit :)

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  5. Beautiful words in English Kokila. बहुत सुंदर रचना.

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    1. Thanks Shweta... your words are precious to me :)

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  6. A very poignant one.....Hridaya ved dene wali vedna.... No words only tears

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    1. Deep gratitude Ravish...... your kind words are my inspiration..

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    1. Thanks Chaitali... coming from you, am humbled ..

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  8. sachmuch udaas! behad udaas!!

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    1. hm.. ye wo gahan waali udaasi hai jab aansoo bhi sookh jaate hai ..... hope you like it .

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    2. Oh I love it...that's why I am at a loss of words(in appreciation)!

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    3. ...and see this thought: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/08/blog-post.html

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    4. Just been there and am awed by the effortless way you spin such beautiful lines Amit...simple(y) amazing!

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  9. Why is it that sorrow imbibed in literature is so beautiful, it gives you peace, sends you to tranquility....your poetry did that....

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    1. You made my day Datta .... Deepest thanks :)

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  10. It is just the other day you started on Haikus no?
    You seem to be an expert now. :)

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    1. He He Indrani.. its your generosity and affection which made you feel like this. :) .. though I am feeling ecstatic ! by your words.Thanks friend :).

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    1. Thanks Madhusudan and welcome to the space here :)

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  12. Beautiful but the next one should be about being happy :D to keep it balanced.

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    1. He He ... you are right Mridula.I'll definitely try :) Thanks for being here :)

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  13. It's a great endevour that you're trying to encapsulate the power and profoundness of haiku in Hindi...this is impressive...hats off...:-)

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    1. Thanks Dear.... aapka asar hai janab-e-aali :D :) am trying but again am asking for honest criticism Mani .. from you of all :)

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  14. Sundar. Shabdon ka achcha taana baana buna hai.

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    1. Dhanyawaad Rachna... aapki pratikriya bhi utni hi sundar hai :)

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  15. sadness and mirrors have a long history... u captured it well

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  16. Yeah Neha... both reflect true emotions, are fragile and once broken can't be mended ... glad to see you here dear :)

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  17. Hindi haiku :) amazing that you could say the same in english too!!

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    1. Glad you are liking these Sougata :) Thanks for the motivation pal :)

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  18. So very intense... Melancholy is just like a broken mirror.

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