The Knell : Haiku


IndiBlogger BadgeI was introduced to Haiku in late 90s,1996 to be exact.One of my mother's student-turned-colleague used to write these  occasionally for the school/college magazine. I was not impressed as, for me, those lacked soul. After reading Haiku here at blog-o-sphere by KristjaanManiparna, and Nimi's I was proved wrong. Then I went on to read the great haiku poets Masoka Shiki, Basho, Busan , Issa, Ryokon ... 
Now,I know that, the lacking was perhaps, in the writer (my humble apologies)or more probably, in my interpretation and understanding but not in the form.

 I can see that much can be expressed in its few words.In-fact the limit provides a challenge as to play with words, to keep its soul and beauty alive emerging thus, as a beautiful token of feelings. Its a Japanese from of verse where 

Haiku makes the mental image born out of few lines brilliant in contrast to the restraint of words.

Hoping that the aforementioned person will not see this and the more yet to come.. er... pour.Here goes the first one -



                                                       
                                                              


                                               raging wind, moans slow
                                              howls and whirls in biting cold 
                                              Ah! the knell of death  
                       
(Inspired by Scattered Thoughts and Chevrefuille's Haiku-blog)

30 comments:

  1. Words do create that mysterious negative effect!

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    1. This is my first Haiku ... Thanks for reading Uppal ji :)

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  2. The pic is amazing.. and after reading the words it kind of comes alive!

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    1. Welcome Farida ji .. thanks for your words .its gladdening to know that the words and pic corroborated well ... :)

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  3. Wonderfully penned, Kokila!
    ...reminds me of supernatural element in Tennyson's poetry!

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    1. Thanks for your kind words Amit... the image did allude of supernatural to me and am glad you felt that :)

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  4. Nice. But it could be the bell of life too, I think! :)

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    1. Yes Sir, it could be ... specially for you, who light up life of others,the world symbolise life,growth and positivity ... I,still pupil a slow learner, at times, succumb to the dark and gothic,hence the knell of death... Am grateful you expressed your view :)Thanks for being here Sir.

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  5. I immediately thought of the listeners by Walter de la Mare, but he used a lot more words to give the same kind of feeling. Beautiful words and image Kokila. Happy Saturday to you x

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    1. And he felt in his heart their strangeness,
      Their stillness answering his cry.....
      Its a pleasant surprise to see your childhood memory revisited .. While writing the Haiku I was not thinking about this one, but you sure have found right similarities as of effect and the mood. The eerie silence of de la Mare's is replaced by that of unearthly wind sounds... Thanks for the weekend wishes... I wish the same for you though belated :)

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  6. Yes..I do agree.." The Listeners"..same kind of effect...only the phantom listeners are replaced by merciless Nature..well done Kokila....

    I told you..you shall excel in this form... :-)

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    1. With Guru ji having her heart at right place, I shall definitely attain the Haiku salvation :D Glad you liked it Mani, and you have worded out Barbara's comparison so nicely which I struggled to answer ! Guru ji remains Guru ji It seems :)

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  7. What wonderful lines! A very inspiring one, Kokila. It is the knell of death which reminds us that we are alive...

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    1. Thanks Ravish ! Ans what beautiful reflection !
      ' reminds us we are alive................' Its opposite but completes the thought in juxtaposition . Thanks for the thought and another idea :)

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  8. wonderful lines .. but its all about perceptive i guess here !

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    1. Right Ankur ... its all in perceptive :) Thanks friend :)

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  9. Simply loved it, Kokila... lending poetry to death. Reminds me of a line from a favourite ghazal of mine - "Maut bhi main Shayarana Chahta Hoon"
    And many thanks for your praise. I am humbled. I too am rather new to this form of poetry. Let's explore it together :)

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    1. Many thanks Nimi for inviting me in your journey :)
      let me quote another line- "saath chalne se safar aasan ho jata hai.... manzil mile na sahi dosti ka pasban ho jata hai............ "

      As for the praise, with phrases such as 'hiding in full view' .. you deserve it :) Glad you like my effort and thanks for the support :)

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  10. Every word has its magic. You just need to put em right :) Congratulations on your first Haiku. Maniparna has been inspiring many (I am one among them and thanks to her I did write out few too)
    Best Wishes
    Shanx

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    1. Thanks Shanx.. and a warm welcome to the blog.. Yes, the lady does shower inspiration left,right and centre :) And I have a feeling that I have found yet another talented friend to embark on with his thoughts... Hearty thanks for your wishes ... And Welcome again :)

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  11. So cold and so moving at a time! I think people in Jammu and Kashmir are feeling the same... Hope everything gets back to normal soon!

    And, it doesn't seem like a first one! You seem to be one among those who has the power to shake the reader with words... Best wishes... TC! Keep smiling :)

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    1. You have rightly said about the plight of J&K people Sindhu and lets hopes for the best ....
      Thanks dear for your inspiring words... I'll certainly try to live up to them :) Thanks for the sweet wishes Sindhu :)

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  12. Your words complement the picture. Great Haiku.

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    1. Thanks Kiran... your words mean a lot to me :)

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  13. Beautiful composition, Kokila! Your expression is deep and it touches me, as a reader. Do write more and more, for sure, you shall ace this very soon!

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    1. Thanks a TON Arti fro such comment love :) Being the dwindly doubtful crab,I certainly needed it... much :) Glad you liked it :)

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  14. Too good in the first attempt.
    Keep writing more. :)

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    1. Thanks Indrani ! Happy that you liked the maiden one :)

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  15. ok that was scary for me as I am just back from the himalayas :o
    good one though :)

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    1. Wow ... You were roaming in the Himalayas !!! What an awesome reason to be absent from the virtual world... :) Thanks for the appreciation and I will be looking forward for beautiful pics n posts on your blog Sougata :)

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