Haiku : Ripe Gold

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                                                                                                           ripe wheat stalks in noon    
                                                      sway and sparkle in sunshine 
                                                     golden braids shimmer


From the lovely " Kim's County Line "


                                                     smitten, a ladybug sat 
                                                  like the red rose of my love
                                                 tucked at nape, tangled !

40 comments:

  1. Really Nice lines . like the red rose of my love, what a meaningful line !!

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  2. Just perfect, the words perfectly match the images and vice versa. Have a happy day :-)

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    1. Thanks Barbara for the appreciation and wishes ... wishing you the same dear :)

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  3. Beautiful! Love the color of wheat, esp near the harvest season.

    PS: Kokila, I see that you are using shuttershock images on the site. I used to use them and the dreamstime images earlier, later read a couple of articles which mentioned that these companies might have issues with the use of images and they treat it is copyrighted images even if used for non commercial purpose and hence started moving away from them. Just thought I would let you know, just in case..

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    1. Thanks Vinay ...for the compliment :) and more of it for the concern.. I am grateful you told me as I thought no need to mention the source thinking " it's obvious " with shutterstock written in bold.... but I'll definitely replace it and the others (previous) ..
      Thanks a ton Vinay :)

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    2. Glad if it was of help Kokila. I used to do that too earlier, but now I really crosscheck atleast thrice or four times before I upload. I was quite surprised to know that they do not allow the use of these images even if it is for non commercial or educational purpose..

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  4. "Golden braids shimmer" ..I'm in love with this line as It had made me visualize the ripe wheat fields nodding their golden heads in joy! What an unique metaphor !

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    1. Love for the lovely comment lovely girl ! I too love this very line ... in-fact the poem/haiku got made BECAUSE I wanted to use this image ... i toyed with many words including tresses , locks.... but 'BRAIDs' presented the thickly set 'GEHUN ki baaliyan' to me ...so it happened :) glad you liked it :)

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  5. Nice one Kokila :)

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    1. Thanks a TON Alok !
      ... you are really one true friend,visiting and keeping in touch with lazy-bones like me ..Thanks again :)

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    1. It makes my day to know that you -the nuanced poet of beautiful poems , found it nice :) Thanks Amit:)

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  7. You give such new life to Haiku, i love reading them both English and Hindi is out of this world.

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    1. Arre dear ladki .... you are liking these is enough and equal to all the praise... one day I'll love to write a line or two on you ..... if only my pen /keyboard will have that zest and life to capture yours :) Thanks !

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  8. The haiku draws the picture even without the shutterstock ones :) Ripe golden ones. Loved it!

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    1. Thanks meoww :)
      And thanks for an inspiration ....I was so inspired by your pics of colourful trees, that I managed to insert the colours of your pics into an entirely different HAIKU prompt - dusk , thus making it an autumn dusk :P :)
      You can read that here -
      http://sunshineandblueclouds.blogspot.in/2014/11/dusk-haiku.html
      Thanks for those beautiful pics :)

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  9. Great Haikus Dear.........
    First one draws my imagination to tarunai & angrai of yovan with a background music of sajna hai mujhe sajna ke liye. All that latke-jhatke & playfulness.
    And second one of sweet & salty pleasant romantic feeling especially of love bite

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    1. Glad you liked it and LOL ..for the background score Padma Khanna received a nice thrashing soon after it ..remember ..:P :P
      so guess the wheat stalks are also cut /harvested after the latke-jhatke ... :P
      as for the second one I was content with the bug perched there smitten .. as in awe ..
      and you Ravish .. a die-hard romantic layered out lovebite!
      the way you bring newer meanings to all of these and make them feel correct too :) Hope you are liking these :)

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    2. hmm.... We too gonna die someday. It doesn't mean that we stop enjoying our youth days :P
      The greatest irony with mankind and the cause of misery is that we magnify our future fear instead of present glory :P
      I intentionally avoided spiritual or philosophical interpretation this time but you ultimately dragged me in. So here is what I got at my first glance of the haiku: The joy expressed by the wheat stalks is not any ordinary joy but an eternal one - oozing from every pore of it. The high intensity of noon sun could also not stop it but provide a grace instead. IT'S the JOY of REACHING ITS FULL POTENTIALITY - The Highest It Can Achieve. Moreover, After Reaching That State, IT GONNA SERVE OTHERS. The Purpose of Its Life is served and now It Gonna Help Others in Attaining Their Full Potentiality by Providing Them Vitality Needed as Food. *sigh* :)

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    3. A.M.A.Z.I.N.G .
      While writing i never imagined it to be like that Ravish .....I just got inspired by the words 'golden braids', 'shimmer' and wanted to write something about the likeness of braids of a blonde girl and the wheat ears swaying in noon sun.... then the bug came and looked like the red rose of red as in pure love .... so i perched it at the nape a bit sensually , admiring the beauty of shimmering braids/ gehoon ki baali ....
      And you, Ravish first interpreted it so beautifully into the earthly romance and now into this tangent.... I Bow :)
      And am glad you interpret all these in your beautifully unique way...
      In some cases my meaning was grabbed by you only.. in some, I had that interpretation in my mind which you hinted at but today its yours only :) Thanks for your time and affection in form of this sir maari with me :)

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  10. How well you spin your words!
    And they perfectly fit the pictures. :)

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    1. Thanks Indrani :) though due to the issues I am now (thankfully) made aware by Alok and Vinay , I have to change the pics :(

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  11. just one word ' brilliant' you mastered this style

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    1. It means 'a lot' to me Cifar... I just hope you meant it in all sincerity :) Thanks for the sweet inspirational word :)

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  12. How very beautiful, lyrical your words are, Kokila.

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    1. Really sweet of you Rachna to say so ... Thanks for the appreciation :)

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  13. That's beautiful. I loved the first one.

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  14. Hello again :)
    I am impressed with your use of 'golden braid' in the first Haiku.
    As for the second one, I have no words. The way you describe the ladybug and then give a sensuous twist to it... beautiful!

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    1. Thanks A ton Nim ... coming from a writer of delicate fresh verse like you its definitely 'happening' :)

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    1. Thanks Sanjay , pleasure to see you here :)

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  16. You seem to having a way with phrases, Kokila. :)
    Love the 'golden braids (that's JUST what they are) and the 'tucked at the nape' :)

    So sorry it took me a couple of days to reply to your last comment on my blog. I was travelling ;) I might have a couple of new travel stories to tell. :)

    Have a superb week. :)

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    1. Thanks D for stopping by... replying late is no problem as its a great news that you are travelling ... means more beautiful shots and exciting info for us :)
      Its pleasing that you liked the play of words and you seem to have a flair for them too !
      waiting for the travel anecdotes to spill .... :)

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  17. Both a re beautifully written dear... But, the first one is too good! I second with all who quoted 'golden braids'... Gold has gained more weight because of the golden grains :) TC! Keep smiling :)

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    1. Yay Sindhu .... So glad you are back :)
      its that I imagined a red lady bug perched on the stalk smitten by the sheer beauty ...as if tucked at a fair maiden's nape smitten by the shining beauty of her golden braid (real hair braid as in blondes ) so the bug is tangled- mentally,emotionally and physically ....
      glad you liked it dear :) Tons of thanks for stopping by :)

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    1. Thanks Rupam :) Glad you liked these :)

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