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Monday, December 08, 2014

स्वेटर : Haiku

रेशमी ऊन 
With Thanks to this creative Mom :)
स्वेटर में हैं गुंथी
यादें नरम

शोख प्यार के
सुर्ख़  धागों  से बुने 
ये ताने बाने

ख़्वाबों  ख्वाहिशों  
मख्मली  अल्फाज़ों की 
चंद  डोरियां 

खुले उलझे 
धागे कुछ गिरहें 
आ सुलझा लें  

सर्द बर्फ में 
दे तपिश-ए -रूह   
दिल (का)  नमूना 

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Sweater

tender and warm fur
a sweater knitted smooth in 
satin memories

                                                                                  from blood crimson threads 
                                                                                 I weave knit and crochet it 
                                                                                  a token of love 

I knit fibres of dreams
and velvety expression 
longings desire ache 

                                                                                   a few tangled knots 
                                                                                   some loose threads overlooked, sigh ..
                                                                                   love ! will sort them .. fresh


Source
in  frozen white lands
wraps, protects and warms your soul 
the design of (my) heart

44 comments:

  1. Your haiku warm my heart and soul! You brought back memories of all the many sweaters my Mother knitted me with purls of love.

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    1. Its the same with me.. my Mother too used to knit and every time I wear one , its her love as comforting blanket .... Thanks for the coment love Judith !
      Warmth and cheers :)

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  2. Aaah, so many emotions in a sweater, a lovely one Kokila, thank you for the English captions, really helps readers like me :)

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    1. you liked it means hard work rewarded ! Its for you and Sindhu that i try to translate :)
      here the emotions are almost same in both versions but the tone and the feel has changed entirely ..
      In hindi its more romantic and candid ...
      the translated one is more caring and well .......... warm :)

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    1. Thanks Celestine.... your presence is a real pleasure :)

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  4. Haye, bahut khoobsurat likhti ho Hindi mein. I was reminded of my mom's knitted sweaters.

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    1. Shukriya priy....Ma ke bune hue sweater ki to baat hi aur hai .... kaash main bhi seekh paati.
      Thanks for the sweet words rachna :) Its your comment love which keeps me going dear :)

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  5. warming series of haiku, masterly act in both the languages

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    1. Dhanyawad Cifar ....glad you liked it in both :)

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  6. Watch this video. It's the picturization of the sweet innocent emotion weaved by you in these heartfelt lines. :)

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IksMyhzF8AM

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    1. Beautiful video Ravish !! loved the narrator's voice and the words... few, meaningful and nice . Thanks for the link Bhai .... and yes, it is as if these haiku lines are picturised !

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  7. I can feel the warmth of love and the wool with your lines :-) ....such nostalgic feelings, a sweater can bring in....especially love these lines " a few tangled knots
    some loose threads overlooked, Oh!
    love, will sort them..fresh" it seems that some emotions and feelings which once bruised the heart, get healed with time and love... :-) wonderful dear... <3

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    1. Thanks Mani for the sweet words....
      yes you felt it right dear :
      ..I underlined Love as it has 2 meanings one - that love has and can heal /take care of tangled,overlooked things,knots....
      and second is - as a calling name for the partner as in "darling, honey etc..." saying that 'O , Love, WE will take care of all .. now and start everything fresh ..."
      Thanks fro the emotion you invested Mani ... Its a pleasure to be read by those who feel :)

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  8. Very well composed.... Thanks for the Translation!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by .. Am Glad you liked it Sir .. :)

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  9. ख़्वाबों ख्वाहिशों
    मख्मली अल्फाज़ों की
    चंद डोरियां
    बहुत ही सटीक और सुन्दर हाइकू , कोकिला जी

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    1. Shukriya Yogi .... its great to know that you are enjoying these :)

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  10. Very well written. Good you translated it too. :)

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    1. Thanks Indrani... I do translate but some times its just not that what it is in the first go .... still you are liking it is more than enough for me :) Thanks for stopping by :)

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  11. Sweet and rhythmical! I like the Hindi one more!

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    1. Same with me Uppal ji... its more free, bindas and reflects exactly what I wanted to say ... Thanks for stopping by .. Its always a pleasure to see you here :)

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  12. I don't know why but I love your Hindi Haikus much more than the English ones. Probably because that makes you unique :)

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    1. Hey Man.. as long as you are liking something here ...its fine by me :)
      Actually just came back from your new year resolution post , hence am saying this - "what you want to say eventually will come out one day .Better if some--one is liking something at-least " :)
      that was me trying to be cool n funny :P
      Sincerest thanks for the interest in my writing Anmol .. :) Glad you visited :)

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  13. Wow, your words comforted my soul... very beautiful Kokila .. bahut khoob! :)

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    1. Thanks Arti....specially when we a re in strange lands away from the loved ones , a simple piece of cloth can b meaningful and important ..nahi kya :) Love n wishes for your new journeys :)

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  14. Can't believe a hand-made sweater can have so many things to tell! Very touching one Kokila... Superb!
    TC! Keep smiling :)

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    1. Thanks Sindhu :) thanks for the constant support and comment love dear :)

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  15. Wah! Wah!
    You are so gifted, my friend. :)

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    1. Shukriya D .. :)
      you are too kind dear though I certainly want to believe you :) :P

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  16. As I sit here, smiling, amazed with the beauty up there in both the languages, I wonder if the warmth, love and emotions has brought the smile or the beauty with which you've jotted them :)

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    1. You liked it in both !
      Pleased to hear that Shanx.... Thanks for the comment love :)

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  17. Such beautiful words and such a lovely picture to go with it!

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    1. Thanks Mridula... pleased that you enjoyed the words :)

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  18. Such a meaningful poem, Kokila :)
    Love the pics too! May love triumph &b usher the warmth!

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    1. Thanks Anita... coming from a poetess who can weave ANYthing ito a beautiful vers .. it is something :)
      In your own b'ful words - joy n warmth :)

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  19. Beautifully written Kokila 😊. Full of emotions in every line.

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    1. Thanks Aseem... glad you liked it :) Welcome to the blog :)

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  20. Waah sahab! Kyaa baat hai! Gazab!!

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    1. Dahnyawad Amit .. tahe dil se shukriya :)

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