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                                           new dreams, fresh start, hope
                                           bright pastures, better,greener 
                                           always, near the end
                                                 
                                                            *** 
         
                                         buds smile shy, tickled

                                         sun kissed petals sway, near by
                                         you are here somewhere 

                                                        ***
                                         hurt, I cried, you sulked

                                         they looked content, our marriage
                                         survived a near death 
                                           
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  3. I loved the second haiku a little more...

    Well done....

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    1. Thanks RS.. I agree with you :) Welcome to the blog :)

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  4. This is a lovely set. I like the sense of commitment and relationship conveyed . I also liked the natural beauty portrayed in the second poem.

    Alice

    PS:Sorry. I'm unable to comment on blogger from my wordpress account. So here is my link:
    https://alicekeysmd.wordpress.com/2014/12/21/end-is-near/

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    1. Thanks Alice for your thoughtful words ....Even I liked the middle one better :)
      Have a nice day :)

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  5. What a wonderful set Kokila. I love the hint of hope and love at the end. The second one is presenting a picture in front of our eyes...I can well imagine the buds are nodding their heads while tickling the 'sun kissed petals' ...beautiful ! :-)

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    1. Thanks to God Maniparna that you like these... loved your sweet comment :)

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  6. buds smile shy, tickled sun kissed petals sway, near by you are here somewhere- Nice set of lines Kokila. Enjoyed reading :)

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    1. Thanks Vidyashree :)
      its sort of a loose translation of this one -
      http://sunshineandblueclouds.blogspot.in/2014/11/haiku-tum.html

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  7. The haiku-set is wonderful. Its writing style reminds me of Kabir’s Ulat Banshi. 1st haiku contains mostly positive words but overall meaning is negative. It says a flame glows more before it extinguishes. On the other hand 3rd haiku mostly contains negative words but the overall meaning is positive.

    The love conveyed reminds me of Rumi. The message is indeed very deep and spiritual. It says change is the only truth. There is a cycle of happiness and sorrow. When you see happiness all side in its full glory, be prepare for sorrow because its end is near. And, when you see sorrow all side in full doom & gloom, don’t worry because its end is also near. No state is permanent – neither happiness nor sorrow. And behind all this changes, there remains an unchangeable – Beloved – Almighty. HE always remains with you. You can feel his presence anytime. Your Marriage with HIM always survives despite many near-death experiences. Have FAITH in your Love.

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    1. Thanks A ton Ravish for the ulat-bansi reminder.. I forgot about it completely! But then . I trust you to rummage out anything to make the lines more beautiful and meaningful :) While writing it was not even in my mind .. so its an ideal case of 'beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder' :)
      Am keeping the last words with me :)

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  8. all good. love the line- you are here somewhere.

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    1. Thanks Neil... I too like this vague sense of being sure ... you are here somewhere... in Hindi its - 'yahin-kahin, aas-paas' Thanks for the visit :)

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  9. always, near the end
    a journey to embark on
    rekindled hope shines :)

    Loved the second one.... (hope this doesn't change it )
    you are here somewhere
    the zephyr whispers the same
    earnestly, I wait

    surviving near death
    our love, deeper and stronger
    reflects true oneness

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    1. Amazing Shanx !! The emotions are intact just explained to the next step .... :)
      Rekindle hope shines
      when all is gone forever
      nothing more to lose !

      earnestly I wait
      as buds crack and brook turns wild,
      I see you .... in life

      reflect true oneness
      beyond time and distances far
      I belong to you

      hope you'll like these haiku-champ :)


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  10. WoW! Such a wonderful set again! Awesomeness :) i fell in love with all the three Kokila. They are profound, deep, and beautiful in their own right and way! :) And the last line is sweetly incredible :)

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    1. Lol ... achha achha last line of the haiku :P :P
      Thanks A Ton for being so good with words and thoughts .... Blessing !

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  11. Awesome lines! I loved reading Ravish's comment and your reply to that... I also loved reading your poetic conversation with embarkwithmythoughts... You all seem to be someone with superpower, you create magic with words!

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    1. Its my first comment to you in New year.. have a Smashing and creative and a Very Happy New Year :)
      Thanks for such sweet words friend... elixir ..:)

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