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Monday, July 13, 2015

अपमान : Haiku





मान, अस्मिता
आहत.... अविरल
अश्रु प्रलय 



पीड़ा दव में
चटकता है मन
झुलसे भाव




तृषित सर्प
सी आक्रोश फुंकार
        
हुई वो राख





मान, अस्मिता  = dignity, identity                                    आहत -hurt
अविरल - unending                                                           प्रलय - flood
दव - fire                                                                            तृषित- ferocious
फुंकार - hiss                                                                       राख - ash





for the above prompt given by our very own Ravish Mani 

47 comments:

  1. Wow, you beautifully dedicated a haiku to each dominant sound! First represents rain, second – fire cracklings, and third – thunder. The sounds truly reflect the intact emotions of haiku. Good job. (Y)

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    1. Glad you liked it Ravish .There's no need to say that your interpretation is perfect :)
      Yes, its the way I 'saw' the sound clip and humiliation was the dominant feeling in my mind after listening to the crackling sounds in the torrential rains .
      Thanks for the prompt and the comment-motivation:)

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  2. Wow bestie.....powerful is the word!! What a perspective given to the audio. Running to write mine :)

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    1. Thank you girl !!! Despite loving rains to the core,somehow 'humiliation' was the feelings invoked by the audio clip... Hope to see the beauty part in yours ...waiting for yours dearie :love n hugs :)<3

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  3. It's so wonderful to read this. Simply beautiful.

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    1. Glad you liked it dear...Thank you Saru :)

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  4. This is an exceptional take on the prompt! I'm just overwhelmed ..the phrase in the first one, "asru pralay" ...sounds so apt and touching!

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    1. I am so glad your hndi is good soul- sis otherwise ite really hard to get the EXACT emotion .... And then pleased that you liked it dear ..you yourself know what it means to me dear :) thank-you...

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  5. A little bit of sorrow there. Unique interpretation to the sound track.
    Very well written.

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    1. Thank-you Indrani :) real pleased it resonated well with you :)

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    1. Thank-you MS ..pleasure you liked it :)

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  7. हुई वो राख ......बहुत कुछ कह जाते हैं ये कुछ शब्द ! बहुत ही शानदार और दमदार सृजन कोकिला जी

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    1. Thank-you Yogi ...for your wonderful words :)

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  8. Shrankhalaabaddh!
    Immensely beautiful, Kokila:)

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    1. Thank-you Amit ... It's a pleasure. To se you here ..always :)

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    2. Thank-you Amit ... It's a pleasure. To se you here ..always :)

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  9. BTW our today's posts are wonderfully rhyming together...Apmaan / Armaan :)
    (And apmaan is somehow connected to armaan)

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  10. Wah wah...aap to kya likhte hain

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    1. Aur aap kya badhiya utsahvardhan karte hain.:D bahut bahut dhanyawad Alok:) :)

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  11. Such a different take on the prompt Kokila. The extent of creativity is simply amazing. Bravo!

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    1. Thank you Somali...i toally loved your 'fire within' take dear :) :)

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  12. what a lovely take on the prompt... awesome Kokila.. :-) I wish I can write in Hindi this way some day too... :-)

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    1. I am dead sure you will excel in that when you'll try to dear :) Till then I am basking in your motivating words :)Thank-you girl :)

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  13. After reading Shweta's lovely take on Ravish's prompt, this one is yet another overwhelming piece I came across. So beautifully penned down... loved it to the core! Soulful indeed.. hats off! :)

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    1. Hey Maitreini so many love-filled thanks :) I am much inspired by the verses at your place so, the appreciation is mutual dear:) Thanks again :)

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  14. Amazing Kokila! I always marvel at people who can write Haiku!

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    1. Thank you Mridula for stopping by and the dekko dear :)

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  15. Wow! Bowled over. So love your Hindi writing.

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  16. Wow! Bowled over. So love your Hindi writing.

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  17. Wow! Bowled over. So love your Hindi writing.

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  18. A unique take on the prompt. Very powerful.. loved it. :)

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    1. Thank - you Deeshani .. I am happy you liked it dear :)

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  19. Intense...What a take on the prompt. Creativity at its best!

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    1. Thank-you Kiran...your visits and words are always a pleasure dear :) :)

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  20. bahut hi sundar... shabdon ka uttam prayog... I liked the use of the word " अश्रु प्रलय "... :-)

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    1. Thank-you Ashish ... Glad it resonated well with you ...welcome here :)

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  21. Heart-touching.
    Effective expression, Kokila.
    Loved your Haiku in Hindi :)

    Thanks for all the nice words on my Blog :)

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    1. Hey Anita, glad to reconnect dear :) The way you weave all prompts into a seamless and meaningful piece deserve much more than that!
      Well, Thanks for the comment love here.. love n hugs friend :)

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