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तुम बात  करो तो बात चले 
चंदा दूल्हा , निशि परिणीता
और तारों की बारात चले
तुम बात करो तो बात चले 

कुछ उन सपनों की बात करें 
जो मिलकर हम-तुम बुनते थे 
कुछ उन गीतों  की बात कहें 
जो साथ-साथ हम चुनते थे 

वो चूर हुए तो होने दो 
जो बीत गयी सो बीत गयी 
नूतन इक स्वप्न ज़रा रच दो 
फिर से फूलों की रात चले 
तुम बात करो तो बात चले 


क्या उन पृष्ठों की बात करूँ 
जो कोरे , कहीं अधूरे हैं ?
या उन अधरों की कथा कहूँ 
जो हंसना अब तक भूलें हैं ?

स्मित रूठा है, तो जाने दो 
जो भूल गया सो बिसर गया 
 तुम कलम उठा कुछ  जो लिख दो 
तो स्वर्णिम नवल प्रभात चले 
तुम बात करो तो बात चले 

How it feels when we 'feel' love slipping from our hands ,when we can actually 'see' the loved ones drifting apart despite our best intentions ? A desperate try to woo them back..will it work ?
 Perhaps, being an optimist, discerning a silver lining in every dark cloud, masking my gashes with a smile, to steer clear from dark feelings even in poetry, that much composure is my fault. If only you'd read, you'll find the yearning of my soul.

If only we can take our words back. If only we can erase the memories... 
Don't be mum, say something , anything , and everything will be fine again . I want to live with the scars than with seeping wounds . Tum baat karo to baat chale ....  


निशि  - night ,  परिणीता - bride  , स्मित - smile,  नवल प्रभात - a new dawn  

64 comments:

  1. Speechless bestie and I mean it from my core, this creation is class apart. I aplaud you and bow down to learn some more, it is so soulful. I felt a voice speaking. No words just floored to read it.

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    1. Thank-you Shweta for being generous with this comment love :)
      What's your site girl ? I am unable to find you ..BTW you not one of the powerpuff girls ? Hai na !

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  2. Reading such a poem, makes one fall in love with the Hindi language all over again. I agree with Shweta..speechless is the word....and Donlt know why this one reminds me of the ghazal --- Phir chidi raat baat phoolon ki,

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    1. I am so glad if it made you love the language Somali ...thanks a lot For the sweet words :) and you are right about being reminded of that ghazal as there is a reference to that in phoolon ki raat ..as well as another to Harivansh RaiBachhan's 'Jo beet gayi so baat gayi '
      If you have not read that then plz do..its poignant and by its( have changed one word in that line ) reference I have tried to make my shallow effort gain a little depth . thank you again for stopping by :)

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  3. Reading such a poem, makes one fall in love with the Hindi language all over again. I agree with Shweta..speechless is the word....and Donlt know why this one reminds me of the ghazal --- Phir chidi raat baat phoolon ki,

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    1. Well I must write something ...so , wishes and thanks :) :D

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  4. Such beautifully written poem. And the wonder is I understood it! :-) so I still have some of my Hindi language understanding left in me.
    Thank you for sharing your lovely poems. Have you published your work at all. You should you know.

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    1. Great to know Shashi that your knowledge of the language is intact !!! Calls for a toast :D
      It's wonderful to know more than one language ..how i fawn over people who are multilingual ...to enjoy the nuancesxof languagd ..its nothing short if bliss to me !anyway its just wishful thinking on my part :D
      So many thanks for the kind words dear ..I am glad you enjoyed it :) wish I could write one on your mystical 'Harmony' someday ...

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    2. Typos ! :( :(
      I am going to stick to one language !

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    3. Typos ! :( :(
      I am going to stick to one language !

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  5. इस बेहद सुन्दर रचना के लिए मेरी हार्दिक बधाई स्वीकार करें, कोकिला!
    खूबसूरत शब्द विन्यास, गति और लयात्मकता का भावपूर्ण सम्मिश्रण!!

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    1. Many thanks Amit !! Your comment in itself is beautifully poetic :) :D

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  6. I'm speechless too. It touched my soul -- lovely words,and profound meaning.

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    1. So glad Kiran that you liked it :) your words mean a lot dear :) :)

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  7. Great lines, D. It has plethora of emotions woven together with a central theme of love. Love is egoless; the centre is not you but other. Love is all about other: “Tum baat karo to baat chale.” It’s indeed one of your best and very close to my heart.

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    1. If it's close to your heart then its good :) Thank-you Bhai for the wonderful comment! You madey day ..as always :) :)
      PS. The stress on that line is well perceived ...as always :)

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  8. this is such a beautifully written poem Kokila.......yes, conversation rather is very important to bridge gaps and do away with grudges.

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    1. So many thinks to say Sunaina .. 'Thanks' for the wonderful words, 'sorry' for the late reply and 'glad' that you liked it :)

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  9. This is such a beautiful poem, deep meanings ... wow, you are amazing :-)

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  10. क्या उन पृष्ठों की बात करूँ
    जो कोरे , कहीं अधूरे हैं ?
    या उन अधरों की कथा कहूँ
    जो हंसना अब तक भूलें हैं ?
    ​ब्लॉग पर जब भी होता हूँ आपको पढ़ना सदैव अच्छा लगता है कोकिला जी ! बहुत शानदार रचना , प्रशंसनीय

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    1. SO many Thanks Yogi !! Your words made my day ! :) :)

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  11. It is one among the gems that you've created. This is truly in one word- Magical. It brings in the steady pace (tehraav) draws you in a different time and then makes you listen to the rhythm of heart and the words it weaves. That's the power of this piece. Beautiful Kokila :) So many emotions and hope!

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    1. See, Thehraav and Shinchan don't make sense in one sentence ! :P : P
      But,no doubt that you know how glad I a must be feeling that you liked it :)
      Thanks !!

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  12. Wow maam beautiful poem , deep emotions wonderful ..loved it
    Thanks for sharing :)
    Have a cheerful week ahead :)
    Regards
    Bhavikk shah

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    1. Thank you Bhavik !! Happy to know you liked it :)

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  13. The poem is so touching and relatable. Loved it, dear :)

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    1. Thank-you Purba :) Feels good that our little poetess liked it :)

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  14. So beautifully expressed.. like a lyric poem..it's wonderful!

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    1. wonderful comment love soul-sis.. Thank you :)

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  15. This is so profoundly soul-stirring. :) Very beautifully penned. The conversations truly depicts the innocent passion of two childhood love birds.

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    1. Thank you Maitreni ... You made my day :)

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  16. I find it difficult to understand as is as I'm less conversant with Hindi.. And the translation here did not help me much.. Repeated reading in Hindi could help me out understand the deep meaning of this Poetry.. A classic Work, Kokila!

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    1. Am honored that you tried to read it despite not being fluent in this language ! Thank you so much sir!

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  17. ek sundar rachna,dusra yadi hamare vicharon ke saath na ho to baat ruk si jaati hai,

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    1. Teesra,I agree with you Cifar ... Honest communication helps to strenghten a bond .. and fourth, thanks for the wonderful words :)

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  18. it was a whirlwind of so many scenes and stories that were left incomplete just in the wait ki tum baat karo to phir baat badein

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    1. Nicely put Datta ... It's disheartening to see love slipping by ... So near yet so elusive .Always .
      Thanks for the read girl :)

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  19. The words bring out the pain and the wisttfulness...beautiful!

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    1. Thank you Ilakshee .. glad to see you after a gap dear :) :)

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  20. बहुत सच्चा और बहुत अच्छा लिखा है।

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  21. एक खूबसूरत कविता!

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    1. Wow! Mridula Hindi me!
      Thank you dear :)

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  22. Beautifully expressed Kokila! Loved it! Moving one!I could feel the pain!!!

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    1. Thank you Deepa ! So glad you liked it :)

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  23. Very great post. I simply stumbled upon your blog and wanted to say that I have really enjoyed browsing your weblog posts. After all I’ll be subscribing on your feed and I am hoping you write again very soon!

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