Haiku/ Senryu : Transience








Soaking up the sun
drinking the blue sky, till dusk,
endless bliss in bloom










Haiku is a Japanese verse of 17 syllables or morae which are represented as 5-7-5 .While writing in English, these syllables are presented in 3 lines unlike the original Japanese vertical line presentation.
The main theme of haiku is nature represented by the juxtaposition of ideas with a 'cutting word' or kireji and a 'season word' or kigo, both of which are not essential for the modern haiku writers. 

Senryu is a 'Human Haiku' following the syllable count of 17 in the pattern of 5-7-5 in three lines but with the focus on human idiosyncrasies and life situations rather than seasons and natural beauty. Senryu generally don't have a kireji (cutting word ) and a kigo (season word) and are  generally dark humored  or cynical.

My above verse here, fits the bill for both, hence, is a hybrid! :)







29 comments:

  1. What vivid imagery! Endless bliss indeed; love it Kokila :)

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    1. Thank-you friend! It's always a pleasure to hear from you!😊😊😊

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  2. endless bliss in bloom - a fact with all flowers.

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    1. Absolutely right! But these daily flowers which wither by the time moon rises, caught my special attention as, in such a transient life, they face everything from sunshine to the scorching heat, from the crisp blue beauty of the sky to the lashes of rain...and yet are joyful! I love such entities Haddock, delicate but iron willed, crushed but uncomplaining..Bliss personified. Am glad you stopped by..Thank you for the thought provoking words! Cheers. :)

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  3. फूलों का सत्य तो यही है ...

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    1. बिल्कुल सत्य!😊😊

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  4. Such an awesome one, blooms are one of favorites (especially cherry blossoms)!

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    1. Right,Alok! Cherry blossoms look even more delicate!

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    2. 😊 You know I enjoyed them in Washington last year 😍

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  5. Perfect choice of words. Beautiful haiku and lovely picture :)

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  6. Thank-you, Purba! Happy that you liked! :) :)

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  7. The haiku is obviously a perfect and pretty picture, and coming from your pen it IS naturally exquisite!
    But what really took me by surprise and held my attention for minutes, and made me go speechless in appreciation is the fact that you placed it in the senryu category too for its characteristics of the latter..overwhelming indeed:)
    Call it a hybrid or whatever pleases you but I can vouch that it is a priceless, rare work a writer can produce in decades of their writing career! I salute you! God bless you, Kokila..

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    1. I am brimming with gratitude that it resonated so well with you! Yes, placing it under Senryu hints at the other meaning beneath the pretty words. About the blues, the thunderclouds, the strong winds the scorching sun, harsh sunlight, its transient life and how the fragile bloom, blooms converting the VERY TRANSIENCE into ETERNAL bliss!
      Thank You For the Beautiful comment and wishes, Amit! :)

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  8. Endless bliss indeed ! Beautiful haiku Kokila :)

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    1. Many Thanks.. I am glad that you liked it, Renu!

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    1. Thank-You! BTW, I Do know something about you as I have visisted your site. :D :P

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    1. Thank-you and, welcome to this space, Jyotirmoy! :)

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  11. An exquisite haiku that makes me marvel about your brevity! Missed your posts due to the humdrum of life...hope to catch up with the beauty of words and the magic you create with them!

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    1. Thank-you, Sunita! It's always a pleasure to have you here... I hope to keep you enticed. :)

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  12. This is a blissful read for readers as well... )

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  13. Endless bliss... only you can write like this ...

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    1. Thanks A LOT Ranjana! It is so nice to know you feel so! :)

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  14. If soaking the sun and drinking the sky is all it takes to bloom so beautifully and make the Earth a lovely place, I'd do it every moment of every day :D

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    1. You are doing it already Ranjini! ... making it a better and a lovelier place..each moment:) Thank you for stopping by:)

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